Many believe that it is important to protect all wild animals, while others think that it is important to protect some, not all of them. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Many people think that all wild
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should be protected,
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others believe that only certain
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need attention.
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protecting some of them can be beneficial, in my opinion, all kinds of wild
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should be preserved. On the one hand, some kinds of wild
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, particularly endangered
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, rely heavily on human protection.
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, the populations of certain
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as bears, lions and tigers have been gradually decreasing year by year.
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, to safeguard these
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, governments bear significant responsibility and attempt to preserve them in wildlife sanctuaries. These sanctuaries, which are specifically designed to protect endangered
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, provide regular food and are supervised by experts in the field. Through
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approach, the complete extinction of these wild
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is being prevented, and
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their rarity and declining numbers, they require considerable attention.
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, all types of wild
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play a crucial role in maintaining the balance of the environment.
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is because every part of nature is interconnected. If
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environmental balance is disrupted, it can lead to numerous problems worldwide.
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, certain
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regularly consume insects, which helps to maintain a balanced insect population. If these
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were to disappear from the world, the number of insects could harm agriculture and potentially lead to the emergence of new diseases among humans.
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, all kinds of them are essential
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if they are
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preserved, it will be beneficial. In conclusion,
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protecting rare
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is important, I strongly believe all
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living in the wild should be protected by humans.

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There is a good link to the idea of balance in nature.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
Topic Vocabulary:
  • natural habitats
  • ecological balance
  • biodiversity
  • confinement
  • natural stimuli
  • psychological problems
  • genetic homogeneity
  • environmental changes
  • adapt and evolve
  • survival of the fittest
  • social structures
  • communication patterns
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