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Some people think that children should start school at a very early age, while others believe they should begin when they are older. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

some
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views
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view
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 that
childrens
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children
should begin
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school
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 early
age
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.
they
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 believe that will help them
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 basic skills like reading and writing,
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 they get used to discipline and routines. which can support their academic success later on.
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in
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 addition, the supporters of early schooling think that it is beneficial for social development, because interacting with other children
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 than spending more
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 at home alone.
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in
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 contrast,
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other people prefer that children
should
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begin
school
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 when they are older.
they
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believes
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believe
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 that the children need more
time
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 to play and grow naturally without academic pressure.
they
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 think that the academic stress will affect
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their mental health.
futhermore
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, not all
childrens
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children
 are
mantially
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mentally
 or
emotional
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ready to sit for long
peried
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periods
 or follow the classroom rules at
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 very young
age
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in
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 my opinion,
i
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I
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 believe that the best
age
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 for
childern
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children
 to start
school
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 is six years old.
in
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this
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age
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i
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 think the kids are
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mentally
 and emotionally
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ready, they can stay alone for
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a long
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time
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 without their mom, and
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 they can
overcom
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overcome
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in
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other
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 hand, their motor skills are ready
in
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this
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age
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 to work or use during
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school
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time
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development
Plan a short intro and a short ending that restate your view.
coherence
Use clear topic sentences for each paragraph and add linking words to guide the reader.
grammar
Check spelling and grammar; fix plurals and verb forms.
content
Give one or two simple examples for your main points.
task
You discuss both sides and give your own view.
coherence
The ideas are simple and easy to follow.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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