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Writing Samples
Band 4

Many people believe that social network websites such as Facebook and Instagram, have had a huge negative impact on both individual and Society. To what extent do you agree?

Some people argue that social network websites
such
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 as Facebook and Instagram
had
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have
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bad
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a bad
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 influence
for
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on
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 humans and
public
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the public
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.
This
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 essay will discuss why they believe so. Is it true that the use of network websites can lead
a
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to a
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negative impact
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such
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, such
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 as depression, loneliness and disconnection
.
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?
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While
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 using social media is
a
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apply
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good, over
time
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time,
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 it has been noticed that there is so much information online and

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Task response
Put a clear view in the intro and end with a short end that restates your view.
Task response
Add 2-3 main ideas with reasons and one simple example for each.
Coherence
Use simple link words to show how ideas go from one part to the next.
Coherence
Make each paragraph talk about one idea.
Grammar
Check spelling and grammar, use easy sentence forms.
Lexical resource
Use everyday words and short phrases.
content
The opening sentence shows you want to talk about if social sites can harm people.
structure
There is a plan to explain why some think so.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • addiction
  • distraction
  • isolation
  • anxiety
  • cyberbullying
  • narcissism
  • catfishing
  • oversharing
  • surveillance
  • detrimental
  • depression
  • loneliness
  • disconnection
  • excessive
  • media consumption
  • authenticity
  • manipulation
  • misinformation
  • filter bubble
  • digital footprint
  • workplace productivity
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