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Band 2.5

The plans below show the site of a farm in 1950 and the same site today.

The map
illustates
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illustrates
 the place of a
farm
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 both in 1950 and now.
Overall
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, the Beechwood
Farm
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 maintains almost its layout
through
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over
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the
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apply
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time
,
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;
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however
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, there are some changes
over
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in
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 the fruit trees
area
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,
sheep
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the sheep
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area
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 and the track. As you can see, there is a new parking lot built by the side of the
road
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,
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;
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in
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on
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opposite
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the opposite
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,
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side, it
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it
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there
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 is
also
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 a
farm
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 shop in the fruit trees
area
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. The track has
renovated
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been renovated
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 into a
road
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, and it can be found the second parking site in the end of the
road
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.
Besides
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, the barn has moved from the site of the holiday cottages to the middle of the
road
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, and its size
became
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has become
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 smaller than before. On the other side, the sheep
area
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 has been divided
to
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into
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 two main areas
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such
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, such
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 as
camping
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the camping
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 field and
solar
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the solar
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 panels. In the camping field, there is a large tree standing beside the camps. In the solar panels
area
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, there are
the
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apply
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four panels to provide the electricity to the
farm
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.

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structure
Plan your answer in clear order: first say what stays the same, then what changes.
grammar
Use simple and exact words. Check spelling of key words.
coherence
Describe changes in a clear order, like left to right or from 1950 to now.
task response
Be clear about where each feature is now and where it was in 1950.
cohesion
Use linking words to join ideas, like 'and', 'but', 'also'.
content
You name many changes, such as parking, shop, and solar panels.
structure
The big idea of changes is shown in the text.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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