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Band 4.5

In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

In some nations,
people
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 prefer to buy a
home
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instead
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 of renting.
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 there are certain causes why individuals
prioritize
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prioritise
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possessing
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owning
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 a
home
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, I believe that
this
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 is a negative development. There are several reasons that drive
this
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 trend. One key factor is the feeling of belonging and
permanance
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permanence
.
In other words
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, owning a
home
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 gives a sense of possession and stability
which
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, which
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 most families seek.
Furthermore
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, when
people
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 have their
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home
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own home
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, they do not fear the increase
of
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in
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renting
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rental
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 prices. Buying a house creates long-term financial security, because a person
do
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does
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 not consider fluctuations in costs of
accomodation
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accommodation
which
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, which
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grows
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grow
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 annually by about 5-10%. A
further
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 triggering force behind
people
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's preference
of
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for
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 homeownership is the ability to
customize
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customise
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 the place as much as they want.
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 to say,
whereas
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 they can renovate, decorate or redesign their own
home
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, it is almost impossible for tenants.
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, owning a
home
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 has a number of drawbacks. First and foremost, it leads to financial pressure and
incuring
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incurring
 debt, as it requires
large
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a large
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 amount of loans and mortgages, followed by utility bills, which ultimately
,
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apply
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 result in stress.
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, in
German
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Germany
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, leasing a property is considered the best choice, since
prices
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the prices
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 of houses are extremely high.
Moreover
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, it reduces flexibility, which means
people
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 struggle to move from one place to
anoter
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another
 for work or studies. Another downside of it lies in the fact that homeowners must pay for repairs themselves. They are responsible for
maintenance
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the maintenance
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 of the house. In conclusion,
while
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 there are reasons why owning a
home
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 is
cruical
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crucial
 for many, I remain convinced that the situation is negative.

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development
Develop each idea with more detail and real examples. Use facts or numbers where possible.
language
Check grammar and spelling. Use simple, clear sentence forms.
structure
Make intro short and state what you will say. End with a strong closing sentence.
argument
Try to show both sides of the issue, then decide your view in the end.
style
Keep phrases simple. Use common words to describe ideas.
task response
Clear position on the topic in both intro and conclusion.
coherence
There are connected paragraphs with main ideas about belonging, price, and freedom to change.
content
Some useful ideas such as fear of rent rise and long-term costs.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • renting
  • importance
  • sense of security
  • stability
  • financial investment
  • asset
  • customize
  • decorate
  • belonging
  • community
  • potential
  • future generations
  • long-term
  • cost advantage
  • control
  • living space
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