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It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Opinions differ regarding whether
people
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 are born with certain talents or can be taught to become a good athlete or musician. I believe that both talents and hard
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 are needed to be successful. An NBA player once said, “Hard
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 beats
talent
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 when
talent
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 fails to
work
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 hard.” Indeed, working hard is a key ingredient in becoming a good athlete or musician. In the fable of the Tortoise and the Hare,
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 the tortoise naturally moves rather slowly, with
perseverance
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 he
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 won the competition. The hare,
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, lost the competition not because of her lack of
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, but because of her laziness and arrogance, a reason for failure that often happens to
people
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 who are gifted.
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, it is imperative for
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 to dedicate themselves to everything, no matter how talented they are, as
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 attitude will lead to a successful path.
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, only hard
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 is far from enough.
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,
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, is another pivotal factor contributing to becoming a famous sports person or musician. Take trainees in Korea,
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. Each year, there are thousands of them training every day, waiting to become real singers or dancers. But with limited positions, only those who are both talented and persistent can succeed. In
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 a challenging entertainment industry, it is difficult for ungifted individuals to achieve success. In conclusion, for those who are not talented,
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 working hard can be a major reason for them to surpass others, I firmly support the notion that
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 is
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 indispensable. In today's world, there are
people
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 from all walks of life; the only way to success is to have both talents and dedication.

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task
State your view at the start. Then discuss both sides clearly and end with a clear opinion.
content
Clear view of your idea in the end
coherence
Good use of two sides and real examples
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structure
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Innate talent
  • Nurture
  • Prodigy
  • Proficiency
  • Deliberate practice
  • Physiological factors
  • Grit
  • Perseverance
  • Cultural norms
  • Structured training
  • Physical predisposition
  • Natural aptitude
  • Dedicated training
  • Societal influence
  • Passion
  • Genetic endowment
  • Skill acquisition
  • Expertise
  • Extracurricular activities
  • Mastery
  • Cognitive abilities
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