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Band 4

some people think that to be successful,you need to get in university education wheras otgees say it is not true . discusa both views and hive your opinion

There is no doubt that success is
one
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 of the essential things these days. Some people
thinks
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think
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 that to be
a
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apply
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successful, you need to get a university
education
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,
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While
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while
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other
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others
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thinkers see
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think
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 that success
is
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does
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 not depend on that. In
this
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 essay, I will discuss both views and
thier
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their
 advantages and disadvantages, and
at the
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end
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end,
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 I will present my opinion. On the
one
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 hand.The
colleges
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college
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 is
one
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 of the ways that
any
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anyone
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one
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 can
do to
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apply
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be a successful person.
On
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In
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 other words,
the
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a
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 college degree can give you
abilities
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the ability
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 to get a better job than other
persons
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people
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that
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who
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 do not have
any
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one
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.
For example
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,
My
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my
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 brother Ahmed
workes
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works
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 as a teacher
due to
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 his degree ,
while
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khalid
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Khalid
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who
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, who
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 is my other
brother
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brother,
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did
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has
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 not
find
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found
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any
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a
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 job yet because he did not complete his
study
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studies
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.
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, if you get a good
level
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level,
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 you can find a better place.
On the other hand
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. Many thinkers believe that
successful
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 is not related to
education
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, but it depends on the way that the person
think
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thinks
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. To explain,
mental
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the mental
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 process of the person can lead him to earn money.
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, most of the businessmen did not
got
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get
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 a university degree to start
thier
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their
 business.
There for
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Therefor
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.
the university
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University
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education
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 is not the only way
of
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to
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 success.
To sum up
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.
This
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 issue will still
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be depatable
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depatable
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debatable
 forever
and
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, and
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 nobody can state a clear opinion
towords
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towards
 it.
For
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apply
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me
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apply
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,
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apply
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 I agree that the level of
education
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 can lead to a good job and a better life.

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grammar
Fix spelling and grammar, e.g. 'thier' -> 'their', 'workes' -> 'worked', 'depatable' -> 'debate'. Also check punctuation and sentence endings.
structure
Make a clear main idea in each paragraph with a topic sentence.
coherence
Use linking words to connect ideas: 'first', 'also', 'however', 'in addition'.
content
Give one clear example for each point and explain why it shows your idea.
vocabulary
Use simple, common words and short sentences to avoid mistakes.
task response
End with a strong view and a short recap of the main ideas.
task
Shows two sides of the issue.
structure
Has an ending with a view.
content
Uses personal example to explain a point.
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