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Writing Samples
Band 2

The diagram details the process of making smoked fish Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram illustrates the process of preparing smoked
fish
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.
Overall
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, there are a number of stages. The initial stages
including
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include
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,
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apply
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 transportation, preparation and
final
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the final
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 stages
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, containing
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containing
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including
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keep
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keeping
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 and
deliver
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delivering
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.
Fish
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 preserved by smoking
is started
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starts
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by
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with
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 catching live
fishes
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fish
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 using
net
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a net
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 from the seas and oceans.
Following
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this
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, caught
fish
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 are delivered to the port by special boats. Having been delivered to the port,
fish
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 are frozen by putting specific freezing box. Frozen
fish
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 are thawed
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then
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and then
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 put
on
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in
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a
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apply
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fresh water. Fresh water contributed to the ice
to melt easier
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melting more easily
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 and
prepares
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prepared
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 it
to
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for
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the
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apply
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cutting.
Cutting
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The cutting
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 process includes removing non-edible parts
such
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 as
head
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the head
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.
Then
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,
cleared
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the cleared
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 parts are washed in salt water and yellow
coloring
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colouring
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 to enhance their
flavor
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flavour
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and
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, and
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 plus yellow
color
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colour
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 makes it more astonishing.
Next
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The next
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 process is to
smoking
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smoke
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 and salted
fish
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 are smoked for a
while
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.
Following
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The following
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 phase is to package those
fishes
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fish
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to
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in
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 the carton box. Those boxes are put into the freezing machine
with
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at
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 0
degree
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degrees
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. Frozen
fish
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 are delivered to the Fishshop
sell
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apply
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by maintaining
temperature
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the temperature
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 in the delivery lorry. Fully ready smoked
fish
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 are eaten by individuals

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Use a clear overview at the start, so the reader knows what the text will cover.
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Put steps in a true order and use words like First, Next, Then, Finally.
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Keep to simple facts that are part of how fish are made and avoid extra detail.
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Check that the grammar is right and use short, clear sentences.
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Make each line link to the next so the flow is easy to follow.
strength
The topic is clear and it shows a list of steps.
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The idea of steps shows in the text.
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Some links to order (First, Next) begin to show flow.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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