Many believe that modern technology has brought people together, but others say that it has driven us apart. Discuss both viewpoints and give your own opinion.

In today's world, technology plays a big part in our daily lives. Many believe that it is beneficial for relationships with people
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others think it drifts us
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has brought us together is
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ability to make long-distance community possible.
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, I believe that the key to a successful relationship is communication.
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, if we did not have phones or laptops, it would be very challenging to keep a close contact without living together. Apps like "
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the video feature.
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, if phone-communication did not
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to the lack of communication.
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drive individuals apart. Clearly, it is easier to message than meet up in
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, it is no secret that even family members choose to text rather than walk a few steps to deliver the news face-to-face.
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society's
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, emotional conversations are being replaced with robotic texting, which
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lead to many
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misunderstandings
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why youths have a hard time keeping a stable relationship in their
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of the argument have strong
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, technology can make a long distance small, but if used incorrectly, it can
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do the opposite.
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, after
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analysis of both
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, I agree that
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significantly drifts us apart from each other.

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language
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structure
Organize in a clear plan. Put one idea in each paragraph. Use a clear intro and a short conclusion.
content
Give clearer explain about how each point helps your view, and add a strong example.
strength
Attempts to discuss both sides and add own view.
strength
Uses examples about long distance talk and calls.
strength
Ends with a clear opinion.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • connectivity
  • communicate
  • social media
  • virtual meetings
  • global community
  • isolation
  • distract
  • face-to-face interaction
  • personal connections
  • dependency
  • technology addiction
  • digital divide
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