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The chart below shows the changes in three different areas of crime in Machester city centre from 2003-2012.

The line chart illustrates the
numbers
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number
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 of
crimes
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 in three different areas (
Burglary
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, Car Theft, and
Robbery
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) in Manchester between 2003 to 2012.
Overall
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,
although
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 there were some fluctuations, the general trend shows a clear decline in
Burglary
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 and
Robbery
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,
while
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 Car Theft increased over the period. In 2003,
Burglary
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 recorded nearly 3,500
crimes
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, peaking at over 3,500
crimes
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 in the next year, which was the largest
numbers
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number
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 of
crimes
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 among all three cities.
This
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 number
fall
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fell
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 sharply to 1,000
crimes
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 in 2008, and
then
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 recovered again in the following years, reaching nearly 1,500
crimes
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 in 2012.
Whereas
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,
Robbery
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 shows approximately 500
crimes
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 in the first year, which
make
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makes
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 the smallest number. After experiencing minor fluctuations, the number returned to its original level by 2012. Compared to Car Theft accounted for around 2,500
crimes
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 in 2003,
this
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 figure
increase
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increased
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 gradually, reaching
at
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apply
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around 3,000
crimes
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 in 2012. It
overtaking
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is overtaking
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Burglary
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 and
Robbery
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words crimes, burglary, robbery with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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