These days with advances in technology more and more people are working from home. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this and give your own opinion.

There is no doubt that technology is essential these days, and people can
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from
home
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instead
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of going to
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every day. In
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I will present the advantages and disadvantages of
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issue, and I am going to give my opinion. On the
one
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hand. There are many benefits of working from
home
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,
one
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of them is giving more relief for workers to do their
work
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inside
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their
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home
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.
In other words
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, many people would like to
work
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at
home
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because they feel safer and protected.
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, Ahmed likes to do his job in his house because he wants to be closer to his children and to look after them.
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, working at
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can lead to less traffic. To explain, if every worker works from
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, no
one
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can use their car to go to
work
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, which means less traffic on roads.
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, if Ahmed decides to
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in his
home
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, he does not have to use his car any more.
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. Working at a specific place can lead to more production. To illustrate
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point, working together in
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room can cause a big production.
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, working with others may bring experience and new ideas.
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.
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issue will still
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forever , and nobody can state a clear opinion on it.
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me
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I think working at
home
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could be more beneficial.

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task response
Make a longer plan. Say your view in one line in the start. Then use more clear ideas for each part.
coherence
Use facts and a real change. Balance the good and bad, then tell your view.
grammar
Fix small grammar and choice of word. Use simple and exact words. Avoid sharp grammar mistakes.
examples
Give two or three good examples, not only one name. Show more proof for each idea.
conclusion
End with a strong clear view. Do not leave the reader unsure.
structure
The essay shows a clear plan and asks to discuss both sides.
coherence
Simple linking words are used.
content
There is an opinion at the end.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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