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Write a letter to the editor of a local newspaper expressing concerns about a community issue. -clearly state the issue you are concerned about. -provide evidence or examples to support your concern. -suggest possible solutions or actions that could address the problem.

Dear editor, I am writing to
expressing
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express
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 concerns about
a
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the
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pollution
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polluted
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environment
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 in my hometown. In recent years,
i
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I
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 find problems
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environment
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apply
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in my hometown
is
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are
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 serious for
health
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apply
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people
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. It can have a detrimental effect on quality
people
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.
In Park
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 near my house has many rubbish and plastic rubbish… many
people
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 drink water and eat
fast-food
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fast food
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 in
Park
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the Park
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, before they
littering
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litter it, which
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 is harmful. I think
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environment
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the environment
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 plays
pivotal
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a pivotal
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 role in life
people
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. What is more,
It
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it
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 affects not only healthy
people
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 but
also
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 the atmosphere every day for
individual
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individuals
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. We need
protect
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to protect
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environment
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the environment
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 on a daily
basic
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basis
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 to protect well-being, improve
atmosphere
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the atmosphere
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 in the future and avoid disease. I think you should
writing
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write
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article
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an article
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 about
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environment
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the environment
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 from
individual
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individuals
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 and
government
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the government
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need
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needs
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propagate
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to propagate
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from
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to
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people
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 to
they
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apply
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widen
knowledge
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their knowledge
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 about
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environment
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the environment
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.
Besides
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that
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that,
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 we should using limit by plastic
product
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products
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 to protect
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environment
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the environment
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. Ms Van Anh

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structure
Split your text into short paragraphs, with one clear idea in each. This helps the reader follow your point.
grammar
Talk with correct grammar and simple words. Use plain forms like 'I am worried about pollution in my town.'
content
Give more real facts in a simple way, like what you see or how bad it is, so your piece has proof.
tone
End with a short closing and your name to fit a letter.
content
Ask for a clear next step, such as asking the council to clean parks or add more bins.
purpose
Clear aim to raise an issue about park litter
content
You point to harm to health and the area
format
You sign with your name at the end
tone
Kind tone and care for the town
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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