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The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relavant.

The line graph illustrates information about the
number
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 of
close
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closed
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shops
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 and new
opne
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open
shops
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 in a country from 2011 to 2018.
Overall
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, at the
begining
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beginning
 of the
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period
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period,
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 new
shops
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 that opened were more than
shops
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 that closed,
while
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at the
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end
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end,
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 new
shops
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 came less
, it
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. It
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 can be seen that
close
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closed
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stories
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stores
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 reached the lowest
number
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 in 2015.
In addition
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, over the
period
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, both
shops
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shown
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showed
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fluctuated
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fluctuating
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figur
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figures
.
Firstly
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, in 2011, the
number
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 of
close
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closed
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shops
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were
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was
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 8500, which was the
bigest
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biggest
number
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 over the years. It
when
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was when
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fall
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apply
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about 4000
shops
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 closed in 2012.
Tow
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Two
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 years
later
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later,
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 the
figur
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figure
 shows
an
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a
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 steady
incerased
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increase
,
befor
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before
 it
alomst
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almost
 remained at 4000 until the end of the
period
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.
Secondly
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, at the start of 2011, there were about 6000 new
shops
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 that opened,
befor decrasing siginficantly
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before decreasing significantly
 in 2015 to peak
only
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at only
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 1000
shops
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. Looking at the graph in
2016
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2016,
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 it
overtake
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overtook
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close
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closed
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shops
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 and
remain
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remained
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 at 5000 new
opne
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open
shops
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over
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at
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 the end of the
period
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, shops, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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