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The graph below gives information about the technology that households in one US city used for watching television 2004 and 2014 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph
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illustrates the information about the
folks
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people
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 of
US
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the US
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,
city
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cities
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 who were used to watching television in one decade between 2004 and 2014.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 in the early years individuals were not aware
from
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 the use of
internet
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the internet
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but
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, but
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with
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the
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time
period
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it increased dramatically and reached
at
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its peak.
On the other hand
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, the lowest mode of communication was
boardcast
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broadcast
. In detail, at least 80,000 people
were
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used cable for watching television in 2004, and steadily decreased its use till 2014.
Similarly
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,
satelite
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satellite
proportion
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proportions
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 were almost
same
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the same
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with
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, with
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the
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 minorly
increased
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 and reached nearly 120,000 respectively in 2014.
Internet
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The Internet
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 was at its zero in 2004, but it rose
up
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its friction drastically and reached
at
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its peak where its users were around 200,000 respectively. Eventually, it is
prove
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proven
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 that the internet was the greatest mode of
communcation
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communication
 in one period of decade.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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