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The table below shows average climate conditions in Dak Lak province, Vietnam. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Zhaina

The report drives a table chart which illustrates the main features of average climate conditions in Dark Lak province. It is clear from the
data
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 that there are differences between the categories, as some
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figures
 are higher than others
and
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, and
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 the
data
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 is not the same for all groups. On one hand, the highest number in
tempretures
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temperatures
 are
April
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in April
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 and May
which
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, which
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is
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apply
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the fixed
degree
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at 26 but in rainfall
it
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, it
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 is recorded at 78mm and 194mm
respectively
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, respectively
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, which is
huge
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a huge
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diffrence
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difference
 compared with fixed
tempretures
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temperatures
On the other hand
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, January and December recorded the lowest degree in
tempretures
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temperatures
 they
reach
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reaching
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 around 21.3 c. When we are looking for the rest of
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the data
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data
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data,
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 the remaining
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figures
 fall between the highest and lowest values.
Although
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 some numbers are
the
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apply
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similar,each category shows a
diffrent
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different
 pattern over time.
To sum up
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, we could say that the
data
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 in
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the table
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 shows the
significently diffrencess
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significant differences
 in a whole month
at
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in
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 the same year in Vietnam.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words data with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 4 times.
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