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The following bar chart shows the different modest of transport used to travel to and from work un one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The bar chart illustrates the information about the proportion of
travelers
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travellers
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 who used different types of vehicles to commute to work in a European city during
a
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the
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 period from 1960 to 2000.
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, the
percentage
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 of commuters who used cars rose steadily over the period,
while
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 the proportion of
people
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 who travelled by other means of transport fell. 5% of
people
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 used a car in 1960. By the year 2000, the
percentage
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 of
travelers
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travellers
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 who use a car
increased
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had increased
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 dramatically to 35%. Meanwhile, growth stopped at 23% in 1980.
motorcycle
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Motorcycle
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 use started at 25% in 1960. and
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 dropped sharply to 5% percent by the year 2000. In between, there was a 20% recovery in 1980. 34% of
people
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 started walking in 1960. By 1980, the
percentage
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 had dropped sharply to 16% percent. By the year 2000, statistics showed that the
percentage
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 of
people
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 who
walk
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walked
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 had dropped to 9%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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