Some people say that it is possivle to tell a lot about a person's culture and character from their choice of clothes. Do you agree or disagree?

In the prevailing era, clothing is an indispensable aspect of human life, serving both practical and social purposes. A number of people argue that clothing influences the culture and
characters
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character
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of individuals. I wholeheartedly disagree with the notion since
globalization
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and personal circumstances are the main reasons behind wearing
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certain types
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of
clothes
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.
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with,
attires
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are influenced by global integration. Modern fashion and
western style
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clothing blur cultural boundaries, making international
clothes
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common in every corner of the world.
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, Indian people are influenced by
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Western
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culture, choosing to wear jeans, trousers, and T-shirts
instead
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of wearing the Kurta
Pajama
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, which is a traditional clothing in the northern part of India. These
western
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clothes
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are often perceived as fashionable and modern in the country.
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, personal factors play a pivotal role in choosing
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. Individuals usually wear
clothes
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according to
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of events, financial circumstances, and etcetera. To illustrate, some traditional
clothes
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are expensive, which are out of reach
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many.
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, they opt for cheaper alternatives to meet their basic needs of clothing. Applicants usually wear formal
clothes
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when they are going to attend interviews.
To conclude
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, types of
clothes
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are influenced by
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globalisation
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and personal situation. I believe that character and tradition
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better assessed by
behavior
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behaviour
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and actions
instead
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of attire.

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task response
Your view is clear, but the answer does not fully use the task. Start with a short line in the intro that states your view, and end with a brief restatement in the conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas in order. Each paragraph should have one idea. Use easy linking words so ideas fit well.
grammar and vocabulary
Fix wrong words and odd phrases. Use 'character' instead of 'characters', 'et cetera' as 'etc.' or skip. Keep phrases short.
task response
Give one simple example for each idea and keep it straight and short.
grammatical accuracy
Keep sentences short. Check spelling and make sure the meaning is clear in every sentence.
task strength
The essay shows a clear view against the idea that clothes show culture or character.
content strength
Two reasons are given: globalization and personal factors, with examples.
structure strength
There is a basic essay shape: intro, 2 body para, and conclusion.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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