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Writing Samples
Band 3

Some people think that news and media are affecting our lives in a positive way while others disagree. Do you agree or disagree?

In
this
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 technological era, there are some people who believe that
news
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 and media are playing
important
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an important
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 role in
positive
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a positive
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 way, but on the other side
those who are
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are those who
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 disagree with
this
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 statement. I
completly
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completely
 agree that
news
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 and media are affecting our lives in
postive
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positive
 ways
and
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, and
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i
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I
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 will provide my brief explanation in the upcoming paragraphs. To start
this
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, the major
affect
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effect
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 which
i
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I
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 see from the
news
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 is that we can get up to date with our society, state and nation. If we are watching the
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news
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news,
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then
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 we can definitely know what is happening in our society
and
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, and
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 we will not miss any important discussions and statements.
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, yesterday
i
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I
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 was
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watching watythe
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watythe
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the
tv
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TV
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 and
then
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 came to know about new rules which were
anounced
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announced
 by the president of
indiya
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India
 regarding
to
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apply
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traffic control. My second reason to support the media and
news
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 is
we
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that we
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 can improve our education and general knowledge. There are many games which
is
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are
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helding
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held
 by
community
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the community
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 or
socity
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society
 to win
the
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a
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 prize after giving
correct
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the correct
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 answer. In that
way
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way,
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 you can enhance general knowledge.
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,
couple
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a couple
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months
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of months
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ago
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ago,
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 there was a show in India which was played by Amitab bachan Kon Bnega Krodptti
,
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.
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My friend participated in that show and gave all
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the answer
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answer
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answers
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correct
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 and won a prize.
To sum up
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,
according to
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 my point of
view
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view,
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 not only
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do these
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these
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they
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 provide some
.
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apply
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important information
but
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, but
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these are
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they
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also
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give
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help
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 us
to
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apply
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improve our education skills.

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structure
Plan your writing before you start. Write one clear idea in each paragraph and keep it to the point.
content
Use easy and tiny facts. Give one simple example that fits and says how it proves your idea.
grammar
Fix small errors in spelling and grammar. Use correct tense and word form.
cohesion
Link your ideas with small words like First, Then, Also, But, Finally.
task
Write a short intro and a short conclusion that restate your view.
stance
You take a clear view in the essay.
examples
You use examples to back up your idea.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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