The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.

The picture entails the process of instant noodles preparation.
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, flour undergoes
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series of 6 steps of mixing, shaping, and cooking before it is added with vegetables and spices and
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packed for distribution. The process starts with a large amount of flour stored in huge silos, put into
mixer
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with water and oil .
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soft mixture
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goes between the rollers to form long sheets of dough.
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, the sheets are passed through a three-step machine
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that
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the sheets into thin stripes and
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roll
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it
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into a noodle disc. The prepared raw noodle blocks are
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introduced into the cooking oil for frying before they are dried and packed into the cups with natural vegetables and a blend of powdered spices. Once the ingredients are assembled, these containers are
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labelled and ready to use. Turning raw flour into edible instant noodles
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take
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takes
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eight steps and about six ingredients to
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achieve
the taste and the consistency
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enjoyed by the consumers.

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