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In the past, teachers were the primary source of knowledge. Yet, nowadays, students have a vast source of information, so teachers are no longer necessary in current education. Do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays,
technology
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developed
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tool, many
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student
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students
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information
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form
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internet
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the internet
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. Right now, there is an
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teachers
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especially
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things
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. They don't need to ask something to
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information
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espessially artifical intellegent
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especially artificial intelligence
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information
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teacher
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 understand a subject or materials. Because of that,
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 still necessary in
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current
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To conclude
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,
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 still important in current
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 lot of people still need a lecturer to explain the materials and to understand the subject. Because of that writer
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planning
Plan your essay with a clear intro, two main ideas, and a conclusion before you write.
structure
State your view in the first paragraph and keep it clear throughout the essay.
content
Give more details or examples to back up each point.
coherence
Use linking words to connect ideas and make the text flow (for example, also, however, in addition).
grammar
Check spelling and grammar; fix common mistakes like 'develop' 'information' 'teacher' to standard forms.
grammar
Use short, simple sentences to avoid errors; each sentence should express one idea.
structure
Paragraphs should have a clear topic sentence and a closing sentence.
content
The writer tries to take a clear position against the statement.
structure
The essay discusses both sides rather than only one.
content
There are some correct ideas about how technology can help learning.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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