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The table below shows local catches and imports of fresh fish into Perth, Australia for the years 2004 - 2014.

The table illustrates the amount of fresh fish imported and
catched
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caught
 locally in
Perch
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Perth
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, Australia
in
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, in
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 the
years
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 2004-2014. Units are measured in metric
tons
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.
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, it is clearly seen that local catches were significantly more than
imported
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imports
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. The total fluctuated throughout the
years
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but
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, but
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 in 2009 it was the biggest. In more detail, from
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years
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2004 to 2008, local cathes experienced a significant rise from 2677.7 metric
tons
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 to 8136.2 metric
tons
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, respectively,
although
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,
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this
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 trend was not seen in the imports from these
years
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.
However
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, from 2009 until 2012, the local catches decreased (7844.9 MT in 2009 and 4271.3 MT in 2012)
,
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furthermore
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, imports showed a slight dip in the year 2011 at 1030.9 MT.
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, from 2013 to
2014
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2014,
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 local catches lowered by approximately 300, but imports jumped
for
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 about 300. The total amount of fish fluctuated throughout all
years
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, but
overall
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, increased almost double, from 3142.2 to 5814.7 metric
tons
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years, tons with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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