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Some people think that governments should spend more money on improving public transportation, while others believe it is better to invest in building new roads. Discuss both views and give your opinion

There is
ongoing
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 debate about whether governments should prioritise improving public
transport
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 or investing in new
roads
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. I believe that, in most urban contexts, investing in reliable public
transport
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 brings greater long‑term benefits than expanding
road
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 networks.
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 essay will examine both views and explain why strengthening public
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 should be the priority. Reliable public
transport
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 reduces congestion and lowers emissions by offering attractive alternatives to private cars. If buses and trains are frequent, affordable and well‑integrated, commuters are more likely to switch from cars, which eases peak‑hour pressure on city streets. Several European cities (
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, Zurich and Vienna) run frequent, integrated services that make public
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 a convenient choice, and cities
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 as Tallinn have trialled free or subsidised fares to boost ridership.
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, travel times become more predictable and urban air quality improves. Building new
roads
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 can relieve pressure on busy routes by distributing traffic, and in some
suburbs
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 additional
roads
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 are the most practical short‑term solution.
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,
road
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 construction often causes major disruption, can take years to complete and sometimes encourages greater car use (induced demand), which negates initial gains. Many large
road
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 projects worldwide have exceeded their original timelines, leaving communities to cope with prolonged noise, dust and traffic before any benefits materialise. In conclusion,
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 new
roads
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 have a role in specific contexts, prioritising frequent, reliable public
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 delivers wider environmental, social and congestion‑related benefits. Governments should
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 focus funds on improving public
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 systems
while
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 using targeted
road
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 building where absolutely necessary.

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task
Show a clear view in the first paragraph and keep it the same all through the essay.
structure
Each paragraph should have one main idea and a link to your view.
examples
Give real, simple examples and explain how they back the point.
coherence
Use linking words to join ideas (and, but, so, yet) for easy flow.
grammar
Check grammar and spelling to avoid mistakes that slow reading.
task
The essay keeps a clear view and gives reasons for it.
coherence
It uses good proof by showing real city examples.
conclusion
The last line repeats the view well.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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