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The bar chart shows information about the favorite subiects of students from two middle schools, school A and school B.Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar graph compares the
favorite
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favourite
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 subjects of students in two different schools, which
is
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are
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school
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 A and
school
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B
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.
Overall
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, the sport
subject
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 stood at the highest in
school
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B
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,
whereas
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 craft and drawing
was
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were
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 the highest
pick
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picks
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 in
school
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B
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. In
school
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 A, most of the students
interested
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were interested
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 in
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the sport
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sport
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sports
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subject
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, which earned 36
votes
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. The second
favorite
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favourite
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subject
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 was
science
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with
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, with
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 9
votes
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.
Furthermore
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, the students picked social
science
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 as
they
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their
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 third
favorite
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favourite
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 and got 6
votes
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. Next was
language
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the language
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subject
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 generated 5
votes
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, and
thereafter
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 the least
favorite
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favourite
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 was craft and drawing
with
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, with
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 just 4
votes
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.
In contrast
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,
school
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B
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 showed
interest more
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more interest
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 in craft and drawing accounted for 25
votes
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, which was followed by language at 18
votes
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. The number for social
science
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 in
school
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B
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 was recorded at 10
votes
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. That figure was doubled the sport number, which stood at 5
votes
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.
Moreover
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, by far the least popular
subject
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 among others was
science
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, which
generated at
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received
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 2
votes
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.

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words school, b, subject, votes, science with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar chart
  • favorite subjects
  • popularity
  • comparison
  • significant differences
  • similar levels of interest
  • subject preference
  • curriculum
  • facilities
  • impact
  • trend
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