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The following table shows the number of people from five European nations living in each other’s countries in 2011.

The table illustrates how many people from five European nations lived in each other’s
countries
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 in 2011.
Overall
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, Germany and the UK had the largest numbers of residents from these five
countries
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, followed by Spain,
while
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 there were only a few in Poland. In terms of population outflow, large numbers of Poles and Italians lived in other
countries
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. Germany had 1,198,000 people from other
countries
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, followed closely by the UK at 1,037,000. Spain and Italy stood at 861,000 and 196,000
respectively
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.
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, there were far fewer foreign residents in Poland, at just 6,000. As for the number of people moving out of their own country, 1,168,000 Poles moved to other
countries
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, which was the largest number. Italians were second at 863,670
and
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 Britons and Germans showed a similar level at 542,760 and 539,000
respectively
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, respectively
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. Spaniards recorded the lowest figure, at 202,170.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 3 times.
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