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IT IS TAUGHT BY SOME THAT IT IS BETTER TO LIVE IN A CITY , WHILE OTHERS BELIEVE THAT LIFE IS BETTER IN THE COUNTRY SIDE. Discuss bith sides and give your opinion.

Some individuals believe that living in the
city
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 is preferable to
life
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 in the countryside,
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 others argue that the opposite is true. In my opinion, I believe that the former is suitable for young
people
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 who are full of
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,
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 the latter is for older
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 who need calm environments. On the one hand,
city
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life
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 offers more opportunities, especially for employment and education. Many cities have a wide range of jobs, higher salaries, and access to universities and professional training centres.
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, urban areas usually provide better healthcare facilities, public transport, and entertainment options
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 as cinemas, shopping malls, and restaurants. These advantages make
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life
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 particularly attractive to young
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 who are ambitious and seeking personal and professional growth.
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,
life
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 in the countryside can be slow-paced, and
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 will be good for older
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. Rural areas are generally quieter and less polluted, which contributes to better physical and mental health. The slower pace of
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 can reduce stress, and
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 often enjoy a stronger sense of community.
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, housing is usually more affordable, and residents can live closer to nature, which is especially appealing to families and older
people
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. In my opinion, both environments have their strengths depending on a person’s stage of
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. I believe that
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life
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 is more suitable for young
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due to
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 the greater opportunities available,
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 the countryside is a better choice for those who prefer peace, stability, and a relaxed lifestyle.

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structure
In your intro, state the main idea and plan in one clear line. In the conclusion, restate your view and add a brief wrap of main reasons.
structure
Make each paragraph focus on one main point. Start with a clear topic sentence and end with a link to your view.
language
Use simple, clear words. Check grammar and make sentences flow, using linking words like also, but, however.
task response
Clear view given and balanced touch of both sides.
coherence
Good use of linking words to show side by side.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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