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Your friend has a problem at work. He has written to you a letter and asked for advice about the ways to solve it. Write to him. In your letter: • Tell him that you understand the problem; • Tell about similar case that you experienced in the past; • Suggest possible ways to solve the problem. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear ....,

Dear John, I hope you are doing well. I read your letter and came to know that you have lost your
job
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. It really disappointed me, but you should not worry about
this
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.
In these
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These
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 days,
recession
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a recession
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 is going on, so several people are losing their jobs. As
i
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I
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 was
also
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 dismissed from my previous
job
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,
Punctuation problem
apply
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 during
pandemic
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the pandemic
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,
i
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I
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 can understand your situation. Despite
, later
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this, later
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i
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I
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 got the
job
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 as a medical office assistant with better compensation,
i
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I
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 remained unemployed for six months. I applied to
hundred
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hundreds
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 of jobs and got
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a myraid
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myraid
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myriad
 of rejections. I recommend
you
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that you
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to
Verb problem
apply
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attend a
job
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 fair, which is going to be held on 28th November, at Metro Convention Centre, Toronto. Having a diploma in Health Office Administration, you should work in
some
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a
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 reputed hospital or clinic. There would be many healthcare employers at
event
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the event
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,
who
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whom
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 you can reach.
Apart from
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this
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, you should apply
in
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to
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 recruitment agencies, because they assist a lot
to find
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in finding
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 rewarding career opportunities.
Last
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 but not least, you should make an effective resume and apply
on
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to
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 various online
job
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 search platforms. Looking to hear from you soon. Yours sincerely Ramandeep Kaur

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grammar
Fix the spelling, cap the word I, and be careful with plural forms and dates.
structure
Make three clear parts: 1) show you understand, 2) share your own story, 3) give steps to solve the problem.
style
Use short lines and simple words. Keep a kind, warm tone with plain talk.
tone
You show care and care for your friend.
content
Your tips give real help to find work.
style
Your tone fits a friend letter well.
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