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The provided pie charts show statistics of granted degrees at the National University from 1990 to 2010.

The
pies
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 charts illustrate the proportion of four different statistics of granted degrees (
computer
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science
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,
business
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, law, and medicine) in the National University in 1990, 2000, and
in
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2010.
Overall
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, it is evident that
computer
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science
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 showed the largest sector throughout the period,
while
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business
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 decreased gradually. Meanwhile, both degrees law and medicine experienced opposite trends. Both
computer
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science
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 and
business
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 degrees ranked first with
similar
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a similar
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 percentage
at
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of
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 30% in 1990, each.
With
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Computer
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computer
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science
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 increased by 10% to 40% in 2000, reaching 45% in 2010.
While
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business
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 witnessed
downward
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 trend, it decreased by 10% to 20% in 2000
and
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 by 2010 it became 15%. Medicine,
on the other hand
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, accounted for 25% in 1990;
this
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 figure grew to 30% in 2000, before falling by 5% in 2010. In comparison, law saw an opposite pattern. It recorded 15% in 1990, and
then
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 dropped slightly to
become
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10% in 2000.
However
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, it
recover
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recovered
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 again to 15% in 2010.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words computer, science, business with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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