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The plans below show the ground floor of a library in 2001 and how it was redeveloped in 2009.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps illustrate the change in layout of the
ground
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floor
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 of a library in 2001 and how it was redeveloped in 2009.
Overall
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, the
ground
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floor
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 underwent significant transformation and modernisation, with the introduction of new categories of books. The most striking change was the addition of computers and a children's
area
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. In 2001, the
entrance
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 was at the bottom of the map. Once entered the
ground
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floor
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, the stairs were on the right-hand
side
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 corner, and the librarian's desk was facing the
entrance
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. On the left-hand
side
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 of the
area
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 were the self-help section and the history section, from
front
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 to back in sequence. There were
tables
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 in the middle of the
area
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, where a section for newspapers and periodicals was next to it, on the right-hand
side
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.
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, walking down from the
entrance
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 through the
tables
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 to the bottom of the
ground
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floor
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 was a bookcase for fiction. In 2009, the location for the
entrance
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, the librarian's desk, and the stairs remained unchanged.
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, the computer
area
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 was added in
front
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 of the librarian's desk.
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, more categories were introduced to the bookshelves on the left-hand
side
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, from
front
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 to back was history, fiction, self-help, kitchen, economics, and law in sequence. The original
area
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 was changed into
tables
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, where a new children's
area
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 was added right in
front
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 of them. The
tables
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 in the middle were changed from square-shaped to rectangular-shaped. Ultimately, the newspaper and periodicals were replaced by fiction and DVDs.

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task response
Give a clear overview at the start and a short end.
task response
Use more exact facts and numbers to show change.
coherence
Link ideas in order to help flow.
grammar
Use simple sentence patterns, not too long.
overview
Clear overall comparison of 2001 with 2009.
content
Main changes are easy to see, like computer area and children section.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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