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Writing Samples
Band 6.5

Your local council is considering closing a sports and leisure centre that it runs, in order to save money. Write a letter to the local council. In your letter give details of how you and your friends or family use the centre explain why the centre ts important for the local community describe the possible effects on local people if the centre closes

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
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 express my concern about the local council's plan to close the sports and leisure
centre
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 in our area. My family and I use the
centre
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 regularly. I usually go
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three times a week to see the gym and swimming pool after work. At weekends, my parents attend yoga classes,
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 that younger brother takes part in a football club at the
centre
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. Many friends
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 use the facilities to exercise and relax after a long time at work. The
centre
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 plays an important role in the local community. It provides a safe and affordable place for people of all ages to stay healthy and active.
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, it helps bring residents together through group classes and sports events, which strengthens community relationships and reduces stress If the
centre
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 is closed, local people will face several difficulties. Some residents find it difficult to attend private gyms. I hope you will consider my solution. I look forward to your reply. Sincerely, Van anh

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language
Fix small grammar and spell errors, for example 'I am writing to express' and 'there three times a week' to 'I am writing to express' and 'I usually go there three times a week'.
structure
Split the text into three short paragraphs: one about how you use the centre, one about why it is good for the town, and one about what could happen if it closes. Use simple links like and, but, also.
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Be clear on what you want the council to do. Add a short line to ask them to keep the centre open or to discuss other options.
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You tell how you use the centre and say why it matters.
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You show how the centre can help the town and people.
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