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Band 3

Public transport should be funded by the government so that it can be free for people who use it. To what extent do you agree or disagree？

Should public
transport
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 be free? It is often argued by some
people
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 that public
transportation
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 should be free for
people
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 who use it. In my opinion, it is true that the government should
funded
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fund
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 the public
transport
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 because it can
benefut
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benefit
 less fortunate
people
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amd
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and
 reduce traffic congestion.
Firstly
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, one key reason
to
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for
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 offering free
transportation
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 is
because
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that
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 it helps low-income residents to
transport
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. As they already struggle with providing their essential living needs, charging them for public
transportation
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 can make
financial
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a financial
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burdem
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burden
 on them.
On
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In
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 other words, they go to work to make money, but they need to pay for the
transport
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 itself sounds wrong. By giving them free facilities like
this
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, it can reduce the number of homeless
people
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 and reduce
poverty
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the poverty
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 problem in
the
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apply
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society.
Secondly
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, another important reason
to
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for
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 giving
funded
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funding
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 for
transportation
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fasilities
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facilities
 is to reduce traffic congestion. Residents would prefer to travel with public
transport
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 because it
cost
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costs
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 zero from their pocket.
This
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 move will eventually reduce
taffic
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traffic
 congestion because there are
less
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fewer
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 private
car
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cars
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 on the street. In
long
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the long
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 run, the government can make
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a sustable
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sustable
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sustainable
 environment
to
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for
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the
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apply
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society.
To sum up
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, I strongly agree with the words that remark
public
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that public
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transport
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 should be free for everyone. The government would reduce
poverty
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the poverty
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 problem and
achive
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achieve
sustainable
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a sustainable
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 environment with
this
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 action.

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language
Fix many spelling and form errors to make the text clear.
structure
Add a clear intro and a short ending, with a steady topic in each paragraph.
content
Give real facts or more detail to back up your points.
grammar
Use a consistent form 'public transport' and avoid mixed words and wrong forms.
task response
The writer states a clear view from the start.
coherence
Two main ideas are given to support the view.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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