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The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items ni five different countries ni 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table chart provides key information about five different countries
which
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 their public
spend
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spends
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 on different items in 2002. The units are measured in
percentage
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.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that
Turkey
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 has the most consumer spending.
In addition
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,
Turkey
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 and Ireland have the highest
purchase
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purchases
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 in food, drink and tobacco,
whereas
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 Italy and
Sweden
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 have the lowest.
According to
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 what is shown, Italy and
Turkey
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 have the most spending
in
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 clothing and footwear.Italy has 9.00%,
while
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Turkey
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 has 6.63%.
Moreover
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, Italy has the highest
percentage
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 of
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this
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these
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 items by 9.00%. In terms of leisure and education,
Spain
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 and Ireland have the lowest
percentage
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by
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at
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 1.98% and 2.21% respectively.
Also
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,
Turkey
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 and
Sweden
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 have the highest
percentage
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 of
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this
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these
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 items.
Turkey
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 has 4.35%,
while
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Sweden
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 has 3.22%.
Moreover
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,
Spain
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 has the lowest
percentage
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by
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 2.21%, which is the lowest item
on
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in
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 consumer spending
of
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in
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Spain
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.
However
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,
Spain
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 is higher than
Sweden
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 in the others.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "moreover, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, turkey, sweden, spain with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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