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Band 4.5

Some cities have few control over design and construction on housing and office buildings. People think that they are free to choose the design they like. Do you think the advantages outweigh disadvantages?

There are
few
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a few
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 restrictions for design and construction on residential and office
buildings
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 in several cities. Individuals believe that they have
freedom
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the freedom
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 to choose their
favorite
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favourite
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 design. In
this
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essay
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essay,
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 I will write about
beneficial
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the beneficial
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 and
weakness
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 points of
this
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 situation for
citizens
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. In many cities, people have several plans for implementing their own
buildings
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and
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it
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there
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has
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are
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 no rules for it.
On
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this
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 situation, people can reduce
the
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apply
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spending money for the
instruction
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construction
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 of
buildings
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. because they can choose the cheapest material for
buildings
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and
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, and
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at
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in
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 the
end
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end,
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 individuals may have an apartment for living as quickly as possible.
Furthermore
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,
citizens
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 can build
the
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a
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 building with unlimited floors. In
this
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situation
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situation,
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 residents may find an apartment wherever they want.
For instance
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, it is hard to find an apartment inside the city in
germany
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Germany
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, and normally finding
the
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a
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 suitable place for living takes more than 5 months.
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as
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As
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 a result, having the less
limitation
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limitations
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 for
constructions
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construction
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 may make
good
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a good
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 opportunity for living.
On the other hand
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, residents believe that building regulations provide greater safety and more comfortable living conditions. It is essential to implement construction rules that reflect the specific characteristics of a city,
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 as its climate and exposure to natural disasters.
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, in Germany, where the climate is humid and rainfall is frequent, houses should be designed with high-quality ceilings and effective drainage systems to cope with rainy weather.
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, uniform architectural designs enhance the visual appeal of cities for both
citizens
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 and tourists, as each century is often associated with a distinctive architectural style that reflects its historical and cultural identity.
To sum up
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,
although
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 having freedom in construction may create opportunities to find accommodation more quickly, it is not sufficient to meet the long-term needs of
citizens
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. Having rules for building not only makes a
safety
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safe
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 city for residents, but
also
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 helps create urban environments that are more attractive and well-planned for everyone.

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structure
Plan your essay with a clear flow. Start with a short intro that says your view. Then put one main idea in each paragraph and end with a short conclusion.
language
Keep to simple words. Use easy, common verbs and nouns. Check for grammar and spelling.
content
Give stronger, easy to see examples tied to the task. Ensure each point links to the view you take.
task response
You show a clear view that rules help safety and looks.
coherence
You try to show both sides in one essay.
coherence
You use linking words like 'on the other hand' and 'in addition'.
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