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Band 4

Some believe that robots play a crucial role in shaping humanity’s future, whereas others argue that they pose risks and could harm society. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays,
robots
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become
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have become
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 a
comercial
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commercial
things
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thing
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. And useful for
human
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humans
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,
such
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 as for housekeeping and for
be
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being
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 a worker. Because of that, some people say
robots
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 play a crucial role in shaping
humanity
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humanity's
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 future and can
gives
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give
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 some risks for society. In
this
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about
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this
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 argument and give an opinion. As we know,
robots
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in
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nowadays
is
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have
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 become an important
things
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thing
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 for human in their life.
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 as, they always use
ai
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AI
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 and automatic
machine
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machines
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 or
robots
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. Because of
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this
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these
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 compact
things
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things,
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 they can
efficient
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efficiently
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their
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use their
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time
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while
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production
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producing
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research
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researching
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 something for human life. In recent years, almost industry
use
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uses
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robots
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 for their
prodution
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production
 to make an efficient
time
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 and produce more products.
Robots
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does
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do
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 not need a rest. Because of that, right now many
businessman
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businessmen
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 use
robots
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 for
production
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.
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,
recent
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in recent
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 years
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robots
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, robots
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takes
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have taken
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 many human
job
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jobs
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.
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 as
,
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apply
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production
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 man, delivery man, and
the
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others. And make many people jobless
beause
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because
of
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robots
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 take their
job
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jobs
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. Many businessman right now want an efficient
time
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 and
make more
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to increase
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production
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 for their business. Because of that, they change their workers to
robots
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than
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rather than
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human
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humans
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. In
conclude
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conclusion
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,
robots
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 can
make
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bring
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 many benefits
for
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to
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human
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humans
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.
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 as in
production
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 and efficient
time
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.
However
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, they
also
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 make
human
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humans
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loss
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lose
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 their job and
loss
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lose
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 their chance to make money. Because of that, there are have they benefits and
their
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risk.
Nevertheless
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in
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, in
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My
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my
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 opinion,
robots
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 can make more risk
for
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to
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 human life. Because human can
overused
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robots
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, and
makes
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make
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their
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them
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 can not
thinking
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think
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 or want to try for
their selve
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themselves
. Because of that, I say
robots
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have
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pose
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 many
risk
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risks
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 for
human
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humans
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 in future.

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organization
Plan before you write. Start with a short intro that states the topic and your view. Then write two body parts for each side and finish with a short conclusion.
coherence
Use simple linking words to show how ideas fit: for example, 'First', 'Also', 'However', 'In addition'.
grammar
Check grammar and spelling so the read is easy. Read aloud to hear errors.
content
Give more clear examples to back each idea. For instance, name a real task where robots cut time or raise costs.
vocabulary
Be careful with word use. Avoid wrong words and phrases that can make meaning unclear.
content
The essay tries to discuss both sides.
conclusion
There is a clear view at the end.
content
Some ideas talk about jobs and time savings.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • robots
  • future
  • people
  • society
  • help
  • harm
  • risk
  • benefit
  • job
  • work
  • safety
  • data
  • information
  • rule
  • law
  • skill
  • train
  • design
  • control
  • balance
  • opinion
  • view
  • discuss
  • in my view
  • on the one hand
  • on the other hand
  • use
  • care
  • growth
  • change
  • proof
  • cost
  • time
  • money
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