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Motorways help people travel quickly and cover long distances but they also cause problems. What are the problems of motoways and what solutions are there?

Highways
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 are beneficial because they cover long distances and
make
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enable
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 people capable of
traveling
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travel
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 faster.
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hand
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hand,
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 they cause problems
such
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 as a huge number of
accidents
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 and
lack
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a lack
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 of
services
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. The solutions are reducing the speed
limit
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 and providing gas stations and supermarkets along the
motorways
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. Driving at high speeds can
make
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cause
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 disasters. The majority of
motorways
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 allow individuals to drive at high speeds, which can lead to
accidents
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. A recent study showed that the probability of death
on
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in
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motorways
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motorway
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accidents
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 is much higher than the probability of death in
cities
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city
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accidents
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.
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,
highways
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 tend to be dangerous
due to
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 the lack of
services
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.
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, there are not many gas stations or supermarkets on the
highways
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, which is a dangerous thing.
Firstly
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, to eliminate the number of
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highways
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highway
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accidents
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, authorities must take actions
such
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 as reducing the speed
limit
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 and fining drivers who drive over the speed
limit
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.
Secondly
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, governments must provide
services
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 along
highways
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.
For example
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,
Saudi
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the Saudi
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Arabia
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Arabian
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 government has provided gas stations
after
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apply
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every 25 km on
Al
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the Al
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 Qassim highway, which was very beneficial for the drivers. In conclusion,
motorways
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 help individuals to travel faster
and
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, and
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 they
also
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 span
over
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apply
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long distances. But they cause problems
such
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 as a large number of
accidents
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 and
lack
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a lack
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 of
services
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. These problems can be solved by reducing the speed
limit
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 and providing
services
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 along the
highways
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.

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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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