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Some people say that computers have made life easier and more convenient. other people say that comuters have made life more complex and stress full What is your opinion. Use specific reasons for your answer and example .

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Introduction
There is no doubt that these days many
people
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are usning
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usning
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using
computers
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 and they have
more
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apply
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faster and
simple
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simpler
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, but
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ones, but
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also
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 there
many
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are many
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 of
them
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who
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 have issues with
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using laptops
. In
thia
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this
 essay, let us
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examine
 both views before reaching a concrete decision.
Body · 1
In terms of
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the postive
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postive
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positive
 side,
people
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using
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use
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coputers
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computers
 a lot
especially
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, especially
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nowdaysin
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nowadays, in
diffrent
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different
 fields in life.
Body · 2
The main reason given to support
this
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 claim is that
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apply
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computers
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it
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apply
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hlep
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help
people
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 in various
filds
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fields
 and
increases
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increase
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 their experience. To illustrate,
any one
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anyone
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 can
be
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do
his
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their
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 work in
his
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their
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 house by using
laptop
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a laptop
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insteed
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instead
going
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of going
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 to
his
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their
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 workplace.
In other words
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,
computers
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 have made working life
easy
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easier
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 and
a
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apply
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faster
process
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apply
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.
Body · 3
Moreover
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,
The
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the
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 technology is not
usefol
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useful
 and unhealthy for some
people
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.
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Firstly
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Firstly,
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 there are many young
people
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use
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who use
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computers
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 in the game.
In
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other
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the other
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hands
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hand
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, they
stie
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spent
 a long time
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playing
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 video games
and
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, and
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then
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 they can do study or
activtes
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activities
.
Body · 4
Secondly
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, there are some who are obsessed with staying on their work using the laptop, which makes
him
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them
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 distracted and nervous all
the
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apply
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day.
Conclusion
In conclusion,
although
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 some
people
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computers
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a
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apply
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diffrent benfits
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different benefits
 and some of
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the puplice
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puplice
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public
 think
computers
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not
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are not
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 good and
it
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they
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 is cause stress
also
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 discomfort.
Therefore
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, I believe that
computers
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is
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are
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importent
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important
 in
nowday
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nowadays
 but should be
use
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used
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it
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apply
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with
a let
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caution
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 and care.

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task response
Make a clear plan at the start and keep one main view with reasons.
coherence
Use links to show how ideas are connected, like 'and', 'but', 'also' and 'however'.
structure
Organize text into three parts: intro with your view, body paragraphs with reasons and examples, and a short conclusion.
grammar
Check grammar and spell common words simply to avoid errors.
lexical
Use simple words and short sentences so readers can read easily.
content
The essay tries to talk about both sides of the view.
structure
It gives a clear personal view in the end.
structure
There is a short ending that sums up.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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