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Band 3.5

Some people say that computers have made life easier and more convenient. other people say that comuters have made life more complex and stress full What is your opinion. Use specific r easons for your answer and example .

There is no doubt that these days many people use
computers
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 they have faster and simpler ones, but
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 there are many who have issues with using laptops. In
this
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 essay, let us examine both views before reaching a concrete decision. In terms of
positive
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the positive
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 side, people use
computers
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 a lot , especially nowadays, in different fields
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 life. The main reason given to support
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 claim is that
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 telecommunications help the population in various fields and increase their experience. To illustrate, anyone can do their work in their house by using a laptop
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 of going to their workplace.
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,
computers
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 have made working life easier and faster .
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, the technology is not useful and unhealthy for some communities.
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, there are many young people who use
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in
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 games.
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, they spent a long time playing video games , and
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 they can study or do activities.
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, there are some who are obsessed with staying on their work using the laptop, which makes them distracted and nervous all day. In conclusion,
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 some public believe electronic components have different benefits and some of the public think
computers
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 are not good and they cause stress
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 discomfort.
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, I believe that
computers
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 are important nowadays
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 should be used with caution and care

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structure
Make a plan before you write. Use four parts: intro, two body parts, and a short end.
coherence
Put one idea in each paragraph. Say how it links to your view.
examples
Give real links to your view. Use clear examples that show why you think this.
language
Watch your spelling and grammar. Use short, simple sentences.
task response
Finish with a clear view in the last line.
position
The essay shows a clear view at the end.
content
The writer tries to show both sides.
content
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Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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