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The table below shows the production of milk annually in four countries in 1990, 2000 and 2010.

The table illustrates the amount of
milk
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 produced yearly by the Netherlands, Australia, Tanzania and Guatemala from 1990 to 2010.
Overall
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, the table demonstrates that the Netherlands produced the largest amount of
milk
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 between 1990 and 2010. The
production
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 of
milk
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 decreased in Australia over the given period,
while
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milk
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production
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 in Tanzania and Guatemala increased significantly. In 1990, the Dutch were the best known for their
milk
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production
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, with a figure of 11,262,000
litres
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.
Although
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this
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 number went down to 11,155,000
litres
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 by 2000, dairy farming rose again in
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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, and produced 11,466000
litres
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 in 2010.
By contrast
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, Guatemala only produced 26000
litres
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 of
milk
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 in 1990. The
production
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 rate increased sharply to 84,000
litres
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 in 2010.
On the other hand
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, in Australia, dairy farms produced 11248000
litres
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 of
milk
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 in 1990.
This
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 number declined gradually from 11,105,000
litres
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 in 2000 to 9165
litres
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 in 2010. Interestingly,
Milk
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production
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 went up dramatically throughout the decades. In 1990, the
production
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 rate recorded 87000
litres
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, whilst
this
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 number almost doubled to 155000
litres
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 by 201

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Vocabulary: Replace the words milk, production, litres with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went down" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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