Essay topics: As a result of electronic inventions such as the computer and television, people do less physical activity, and this is having a negative effect on their health. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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this
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developing world, there are lots of inventions
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, including
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electronics. As an example ,
computer
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computers
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and
television
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televisions
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are in the major
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category
among
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other inventions.
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However
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there is a strong
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between
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among
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people
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,
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about
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that
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there is a huge negative impact
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on
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the
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public health
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these technical elements. I
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totally agree with
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statement ,
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some reasons.
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, communities mostly
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these technologies for their
amusements
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entertainment
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. There are many entertainment
programmes
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. As an example ,gaming
programmes
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, some singing
dancing
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and dancing
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competions
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competitions
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, cooking
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, some cookery
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, and some cartoons for kids.
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people
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get attracted
for
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to
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these
programmes
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. There are many entertainment items.Television
programmes
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,
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however
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, after work adults
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use
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tend
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to be relaxed with
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technologies.
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negative impact is
these
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on these
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individuals . Its
draw back
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drawback
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is
these
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that these
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individuals try to neglect their physical activities, and kids
use
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to neglect their play time, and it is a straightaway it is
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a huge
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for
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their
healthylife
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healthy life
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,
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from
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television
these
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, these
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communities
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get more
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chances
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to watch some food advertisements
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, and
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it always
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information about new food , and
it
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This
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always
enocourage
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encourages
. The public
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nutitions
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nutrition
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of
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the
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people
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to
exeperience
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experiencing
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tastes
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, and they follow the new taste. and it's having less
nutritios
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nutrients
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,
finally
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it caused to
reduce
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their
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in their
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fitness level and ..........
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,
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lack of
awereness
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awareness
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people
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may
loose
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lose
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their health fitness
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.
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the society
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may have to have a
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decisive plan
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and should
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use
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full
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fully
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utilise these
usefull
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useful
electronic
equipments
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equipment
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structure
Plan first. Start with a short view. Then give two or three ideas with small examples. End with a short closing line.
language
Use simple and clear words. Keep to common words. Fix big grammar errors.
cohesion
Put each idea in order. Use small linking words like and, but, also, so, because.
content
Give one or two examples that fit each point.
editing
Check spelling and end marks. Capital at start and full stop at end.
tone
Show your view steady. Do not put many words that do not help your point.
content
You pick the topic well and try to show your view.
structure
There is some idea of how the tech use may strain health.
Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
Topic Vocabulary:
  • computer
  • television
  • phone
  • screen
  • time
  • people
  • move
  • walk
  • sit
  • exercise
  • health
  • weight
  • heart
  • mind
  • life
  • risk
  • good
  • bad
  • habit
  • change
  • effect
  • activity
  • sport
  • plan
  • choice
  • balance
  • break
  • school
  • work
  • home
  • app
  • game
  • online
  • video
  • design
  • promote
  • prevent
  • improve
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