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Writing Samples
Band 4

Developing countries should be encouraged to implement high tariffs to grow their local industries. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Many
people
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 think that less economically developed countries should be supported to
put
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incur
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 high
cost
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costs
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 to improve their production
industries
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. I do not support
this
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 idea as the prices of
products
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 for society will be higher
and
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, and
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 there will not be
improvment
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improvement
 in goods. Many
people
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 agree with
this
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 idea since the country's domestic economy will develop. It will be difficult for
people
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 to buy things from abroad
due to
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 the
expensive
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high
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 price of
import
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imports
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.
As a result
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,
people
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 will focus more on local production and industrial growth.
Also
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, high tariffs provide temporary relief to
fledjing
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fledgling
industries
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. It helps local
business
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businesses
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 to grow and develop inside the country.
However
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,I disagree with
this
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 opinion as the
rpices
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prices
 of
products
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 will be expensive for citizens, which makes
product
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the product
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 inaccessible.
People
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 with low wages in developing countries cannot buy basic necessities.
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, there will not be competition among
industries
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, especially from abroad.
As a result
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,
industries
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 will not try to improve the quality of
products
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 or reduce costs, which
is make
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makes
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people
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to
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apply
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buy goods without
option
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options
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.
For example
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,
person
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a person
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 with
small
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a small
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 wage
spent
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spends
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 most of their money
to
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on
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 basic
products
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and
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, and
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this
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is increase
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increases
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 the
standart
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standard
 of living. Or when local production
do
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does
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 not have
competitor
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a competitor
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 from abroad, they
not
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do not
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 try to improve the quality and service,
then
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,
people
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 have to buy
in
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at
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high
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a high
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 cost.  In
cocnlusion
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conclusion
, even
thought
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though
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the
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apply
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putting high
tarrifs
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tariffs
develop
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develops
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 the economy and helps
to
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apply
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local
industries
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 grow. I do not agree, it causes
expensive
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high
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 prices for ordinary
people
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 and
reduce
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a reduction
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 in quality.

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structure
Plan your answer with a clear map. Use one idea per paragraph and link them with simple words.
task response
State your position in the first sentence and keep it clear throughout the essay.
coherence
Use linking words to show how ideas fit. Use basic words like and, but, also, so.
language
Check spelling and grammar. Fix common errors in words like prices, example, standard.
examples
Give one strong example to show how tariffs affect prices or jobs.
style
Use shorter sentences to avoid mistakes. Keep the style simple.
content
You show a clear view that tariffs may raise prices.
analysis
You discuss both sides and give a choice.
coherence
There is some use of linking and order in ideas.
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • tariffs
  • local industries
  • foreign competition
  • economic growth
  • job creation
  • domestic demand
  • retaliate
  • trade wars
  • consumer choice
  • imported goods
  • foreign investment
  • technology transfer
  • protectionism
  • nascent businesses
  • sustaining businesses
  • national pride
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