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Most societies are based on rules and laws. If individuals were free to do whatever they wanted, society could not function. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In the modern era,
people
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 must follow
rules
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 to be a part of a community. Some
people
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 think that, if there weren’t any
rules
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,
society
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 would malfunction. I completely agree that
rules
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 are needed to keep
people
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 in order. In
this
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 essay, I will demonstrate how important
rules
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 are in
society
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.
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, the absence of
rules
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 will lead to anarchy and chaos. Without
law
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 enforcement and moral
regulation
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regulation,
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 the rate of crime and theft will increase
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 there will be nothing that holds them back from doing bad deeds.
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, in ancient
years
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times
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 when
people
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 did not have
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law
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laws
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, there were lots of crimes. If
people
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 had instructions about what they should or shouldn't
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 crime rate may have been low.
People
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 are, normally, scared of doing wrong things because they know that in a lawful
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society
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society,
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 it will always be followed by sanctions.
Law
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 enforcement is the scale that prevents humans from choosing the wrong path.
Secondly
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, laws and regulations are the foundation of a peaceful, healthy
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. It helps
people
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 to have a sense of what is right and wrong and acts as a moral compass.
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, in the modern era, all countries have their own constitution. By
following
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this
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 main
law
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, they can protect their peace and safety.
Furthermore
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, a lawful and safe
society
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 gives its citizens a moral sense about doing the right things. In conclusion, a healthy
society
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 should be managed by laws and
rules
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. Establishing
rules
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 is essential for creating a stable
society
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. Social healthy communication starts from a safe environment which is created by
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 and
rule
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.

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coherence
Work on the flow between ideas. In each paragraph, put one main idea first, then add a short reason or example. Use linking words like first, then, also, and finally to show the order.
coherence
Avoid repeating the same point. Group related ideas in one paragraph. Check that each sentence connects to the last and leads to the next.
task
Be clear about your view and keep it steady. Add one or two exact examples to show why rules help, and explain how rules stop bad acts.
task
Give a specific example for each idea and explain how it supports your view. This will make your essay stronger and more convincing.
stance
The essay states a clear view that rules are needed.
structure
Intro and conclusion show the plan and end the piece.
reasons
There are reasonable reasons given for why rules help society.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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