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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

In our modern life, several things have developed. One of these things is newspapers and
books
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. Nowadays,
people
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 do not need to buy them; they can read them on websites and applications.
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 it is a commonly held belief that
books
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 and newspapers will not be consumed
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 technology, there is
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 an argument from opponents. In my opinion, I tend to believe that these
new
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 promoted methods will become the new way to take in information and news.
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 with, online methods will save
people
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 money. To exemplify, newspapers and
books
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 are costly, especially for those
people
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 who buy them frequently.
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, one of my friends buys a newspaper every day, which costs him 100 SAR per month from his budget.
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, digital texts may save
people
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time
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.
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, they can be read on public transportation or during work
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.
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, my father usually reads the BBC newspaper on the train to make good use of
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time
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his time
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. Another point to consider is that there are a lot of sources online, so we can read the news from many websites. It is possible to say that
people
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 can get information from several references, which leads them to read more about the topic they are looking for.
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, even though
people
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 have different opinions, I believe that soft copies of
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 and news are better than hard copies because they allow
people
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 to save their money, and they can read
everywhere
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them everywhere
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 they want at any
time
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.

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structure
Plan before you write. Start with your main view, then add two or three reasons, and finish with a short end.
content
Add one or two strong examples for each point and explain how they show money or time saved.
language
Check your grammar and word use. Some phrases are a bit awkward. Use simple, clear sentences.
content
Keep the idea about paying in online reading to fit the task. The topic asks about free online reading and buying printed copies.
content
The essay shows a clear view and ends with a stance.
structure
Good use of linking phrases like 'To begin with' and 'In addition'.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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