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In general, people do not have such a close relationship with their neighbours as they did in the past. Why is this so? Do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, there is a growing debate about weakened
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 with neighbours compared to strong ones in the past, and there are several factors contributing to
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 significant shift in the
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present
. One of the reasons is changes in lifestyle. In our present life, there are a lot of things that change,
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 as daily routines and
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's preferences. To clarify
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 point,
people
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 used to help and provide support for each for their neighbors always, but now
people
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 tend not to give any support to others and not even ask for it. Regarding
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's preferences, these days
people
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 want to go out and have fun with their friends , either in a coffee shop or shopping in a mall.
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 shift, individuals tend to have weak
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 with their neighbours. Another major factor is the changes in
people
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's communication habits. Previously,
people
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 did not have a variety of communication ways; they usually communicated with each other either by face-to-face chat or by sending letters, which was time and effort-intensive, which made
people
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 use the new technology that has a lot of beneficial features regarding video calls, voice calls, and receiving messages within seconds from all over the world. But it is one of the key reasons for the presence of weakened
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 with neighbours. In conclusion, despite some obvious reasons that have led
people
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 to have fragile
relationships
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, I think individuals can adapt to the new changes in lifestyle and communication ways, but with a sense of unity and friendship.

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organization
Plan your essay with a clear map: intro, 2 or 3 body parts, and a short end.
task
Say your view clearly in the intro or in the last line.
grammar
Use simple, clean sentences. Check grammar and avoid long lines.
cohesion
Link ideas with small words like also, but, for example to help flow.
content
Give more clear examples about neighbours, like sharing food or helping with a task.
accuracy
Check spelling and word choice to avoid small mistakes.
structure
Clear intro and conclusion are present.
content
Some ideas on lifestyle and use of tech.
argument
Two main reasons are given.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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