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bar chart below show the huors per week teenagers spend on activities in Chester from 2002 to 2007

The bar chart gives information about the
hours
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 per
week
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 teenagers spend on
activities
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 in Chester between 2002 and 2007.
Overall
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, it can be seen that
time
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 spent on
activities
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 like going to pubs , watching television , and shopping had shown
increase
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an increase
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 in number throughout the whole
time
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 period,
while
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 there was a decrease in the number of
hours
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 in other
activities
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 like doing homework, doing sport and bowling. The highest number of
hours
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 was spent
on
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apply
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watching television over other
activities
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.
Time
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 spent on
activities
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 started at 25
hours
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 per
week
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 for watching television, around 10
hours
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 for going to pubs, and approximately 5
hours
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 for shopping,
then
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this
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 figure increased marginally and ended with nearly 40
hours
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 per
week
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, close to 20
hours
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 per
week
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, and precisely 15
hours
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 per
week
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, respectively.
However
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, other
activities
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 declined gradually from where they had started.
Time
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 spent on
activities
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 began at just above 10
hours
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 on doing homework, around 10
hours
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 on doing sports , and below 5
hours
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 on bowling,
whereas
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 it went down
at
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to
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 around 5
hours
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, below 5
hours
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, and nearly 0
hours
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, respectively.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, week, activities, time with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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