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DECEMBER 14 Part 1: The chart below shows the spending (in million dollars) per household in the US on five different products in 2010 and 2014

The bar chart gives information about how much money was spent by households on 5 different products ,
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 as food, clothes, books, smartphones and televisions from 2010 to 2014.
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, the highest spending money by people was on food.The smallest amount of a
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 spent on a book. The amount of spending on food started at 3700
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 in 2010 , and
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 was followed by a considerable growth to just under 4500
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 in 2014. The proportion of spending on clothing remained unchanged over the 4 years at 25
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 .
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 the figure for books reported the lowest at just 1000
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dollars
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 in 2010.
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 was halved to 500
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 in 2014, respectively.
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, spending on smartphones gradually increased to around 2700
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 and the trend in 2014.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words million, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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