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The bar chart below shows numbers of seals, whales and dolphins recorded in the Gormez Straits from 2006 to 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar graph
illustarets
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illustrates
 how many figures of
seals
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, whales and
dolphins
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 populations who
noteble
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notable
 in the
Gormez
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Gomera
 Straits between 2006 and 2018.
Overall
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, what stands out from the graph is that
while
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 the numbers of populations of three types of fish
has
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have
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 increased by
end
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the end
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 of the
period
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, the figures of
dolphins
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 rose
significant
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with in
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within
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 that time. Focusing on the
seals
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 and
dolphins
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 at the beginning of the
period
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, the former has recorded the highest figures with around 43
who
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that
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lives
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live
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 on the straits,
whereas
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 the latter has the lowest with about 18.
after
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After
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 2006, the number of
seals
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drop
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dropped
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 dramatically to approximately 25 in 2010 and has increased again to about 55
seals
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 in 2018,
while
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 the populations of 
dolphins
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has
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have
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grow
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grown
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 during the
period
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 and
record
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recorded
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 about 52 in 2018.
Turing
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Turning
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 to the whales over the
period
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 covered by the graph
has following
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shows
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 some
fluctution
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fluctuation
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, to
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to
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 around 23 whales in 2006 to about 28 in 2008.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words seals, dolphins, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • increase, rise, go up
  • decrease, fall, go down
  • grow
  • stay the same, not change
  • peak, highest point
  • dip, drop
  • more, less
  • the most, the least
  • by year, year by year, over the years
  • overall, total
  • numbers, counts
  • seals, whales, dolphins
  • compare with, in comparison with
  • trend, pattern
  • early years, later years
  • 2006, 2018
  • across the chart
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