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Writing Samples
Band 3.5

if a product is good or it meets ppeoples needs.people will but it. advertising is no more than a form of entertainment. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is arguable that advertising a
product
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 is just a form of entertainment, the actual good is brought by
the
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mankind if it satisfies the needs and wants of the customer. I partially support the
arguement
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argument
 and will
disucss
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discuss
 the points in the upcoming paragraph. The key star is the item itself, as it is
build
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built
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 after careful consideration of the demand of the individuals and considering the affordability of the people. If the nature of the good is strong enough to stay at
top
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the top
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 of the business without promoting it
on
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in
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 the
media
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media,
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than
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then
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 definitely it will boost the sales.
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, in
tradtional
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traditional
times
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times,
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 businesses like Haldiram masala solely
survives
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survive
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of
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on
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 the quality of the
product
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 and from a small shop it turns it into
whole
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a whole
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 adventure.
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hand
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hand,
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 if the marketing of the
product
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 is done
right
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right,
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 it can definitely boost the sales of the item as it not only
widen
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widens
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 the scope but
also
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 attracts the target audience. If the marketing
done
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is done
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 right
not
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, not
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 only
it
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does it
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increases
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increase
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 the sales but
also
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 gives the
product
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 a new life.
For instance
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, in the growing
sectors
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sectors,
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 especially the beauty
worlds
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world
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all
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, all
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 the products are promoted through advertisement from famous
celebrtites
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celebrities
. Rhode is the biggest example of what
a
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an
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 advertisement is. In conclusion,
although
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 a
product
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 is consumed by the buyer only when it is reliable but a right method of promotion can serve as a key
acheivement
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achievement
 for the
product
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.

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grammar/vocabulary
Fix miss words like arguement, disucss, tradtional and other spelling errors.
coherence
Make ideas flow. Use simple linking words (first, also, but, for example) to show how ideas fit.
content
Give more detail on each idea. Add why a point matters and how it helps.
structure
Keep a clear view all through. End with a strong line that repeats your view.
lexical resource
Use easy words. Do not use long phrases that may be hard to read.
content
You show a view and try to use examples.
structure
There is an intro and a conclusion.
content
You use simple real life examples to back a point.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • product
  • good
  • buy
  • need
  • people
  • ads
  • ad
  • advertising
  • entertainment
  • inform
  • persuade
  • sell
  • price
  • value
  • quality
  • feature
  • use
  • market
  • audience
  • brand
  • trust
  • message
  • effect
  • influence
  • choice
  • reason
  • result
  • case
  • long-term
  • short-term
  • success
  • failure
  • honest
  • clear
  • simple
  • easy
  • online
  • store
  • shop
  • problem
  • solve
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