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The graph below gives historical information and projections about changes in population in the United States, Nigeria and Japan.

The line graph illustrates the
number of
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population
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, tracking changes in
Nigeria
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,
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States
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, and Japan over the
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 from 1950 to 2050.
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, upward trends were observed in
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 and
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States
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,
while
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 Japan faced only minimal changes throughout the
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,
Nigeria
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 was the country
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 which increased substantially between 1950 and 2050. In detail,
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States
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 rose moderately, climbing to roughly 450
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millions
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of
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people
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 from slightly under 200
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millions
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of
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people
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at the end
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 of the
period
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. Between 2025 and 2050, the
number of
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population
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 in
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States
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 will be the same as in
Nigeria
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 at around 400million
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people
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then
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 they will begin to diverge.
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, a
marjinal fluctating
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marginal fluctuation
 was observed in
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population
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the population
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 of Japan,
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 from 100
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millions
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million
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 and
ended
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 up slightly more than 100
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millions
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. In 2000, it reached its highest level when it was at the same point
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Nigeria
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 at around 110
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millions
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million
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of
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population
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. Since
2000s
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,
Nigeria
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's
population
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shoot
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 up significantly from around 110
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millions
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million
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 to 600
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millions
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million
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of
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people
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 in the final
of
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period
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, nigeria, states, period, millions, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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