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The table describes the changes of people who went for international travel in 1990,1995,2000 and 2005(million).

The given table compares
thechanges
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the changes
 of
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people
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 who went to
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foreign
 travel to five different countries in 1990, 1995, 2000 and 2005.
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, the proportion of
traveler
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people
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to
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Europe was higher than
than
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other
catogories
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categories
,
such
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 as Asia and the
pacific
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Pacific
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 and America. In all the
chenges
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changes
 of international
people
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 to the Middle East represented
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a
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minor proportion. In
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the country
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Europe
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of Europe
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, the total amount of international
turist
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tourists
 is highest, at 280.2
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millions
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million
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 in 1990, after which it improved
further
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 until the end of the year to 400.2
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millions
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million
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 in 2005.
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in
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 addition, those who have
experienced
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of
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 international travel to
the
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Asia and the
pacific
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Pacific
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 started with
minor
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propotion
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proportion
 and continue to grow until
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the end-of-year
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 period.
This
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 initiated with represented by 60.2
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millions
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million
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 in 1990, a figure that
then
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 rose
80.3
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million
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 and
then
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 117.4
million
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then
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135.8
million
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 for
travelers
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travellers
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 in
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the year
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year
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years
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 1995,2000 and
2005
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2005,
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 respectively.
Meaningwhile
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Meanwhile
, the
people
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 who have
traveled
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travelled
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internationaly
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internationally
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a
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very low figure
was recorded
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with 9.8
million
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 in 1990
and
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this
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 was followed by a
considerably
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 rise by
th
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the
 end of the year to 15.8
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millions
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million
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 in 2005.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, millions, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "represented" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • significant increase
  • international travel
  • popular destinations
  • economic growth
  • technological advancements
  • ease of travel
  • cultural exchange
  • globalization
  • fluctuations
  • trend
  • millions of travelers
  • annual growth rate
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