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The following bar chart shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000.

The bar chart illustrates the different methods of transport used to travel
and
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 from work in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000.
Overall
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, both the bike and the foot saw a similar
declined
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decline
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 in these years.
Moreover
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, the bus was
rise
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rising
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 steadily at first but
have
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had
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 plummeted at
the-end-of-year
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the year
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.
However
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, the use of
car
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cars
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 is the only one which
have
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has
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dramatically
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grown dramatically
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growth
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apply
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. First of all, the bike had a significant decrease from 30
percentage
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 of total
travellers
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 in 1960 to 5
percentage
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 in 2000.
Similarly
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, the foot
was
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apply
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also
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 had a
sharply
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sharp
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 drop, from 34
percentage
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 of total
travellers
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 in 1960 to 9
percentage
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 in 2000.
Moreover
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, the bus
was
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apply
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rose steadily from 18
percentage
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 of total
travellers
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 in 1960 to 26
percentage
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 in 1980. But it experienced
the
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a
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slightly dropped
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slight drop
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for
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of
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 15
percentage
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 in 2000.
However
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, the car was the only one which saw a
dramatically
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dramatic
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 rise in these categories. It started from 5
percentage
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 of total
travellers
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 in 1960, and
then
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 grew sharply to 23
percentage
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 in 1980 and 36
percentage
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 in 2000.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, moreover".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, travellers with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 10 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
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