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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

The line chart provides key information about the
amount
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number
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 of tourists
that
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who
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visits
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visit
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 a specific Caribbean
island
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 between 2010 and 2017. Units are measured in numbers.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that the
number
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 of tourists
have
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has
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 increased
through
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throughout
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 the entire period.
In addition
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, people who reside on the
island
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 were lower in numbers,
where
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is
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apply
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those who stayed on cruise were the highest in 2017.
According to
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it
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apply
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is shown, the
number
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 of men and women in 2010
that
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who
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 stayed on cruise ships
were
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was
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 nearly 0.3 million, but kept fluctuating in the following years until it reached the highest point in 2017,
by
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surpassing the
amount
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number
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 of people who resided on the
island
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, and
became
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reaching
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 2 million
visitors
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. In terms of the count of
visitors
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 who lived on cruise ships, people
that
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who
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 stayed on the
island
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 were the highest in 2017,
they reached
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reaching
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 0.8 million
visitors
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but
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, but
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 kept
gradual
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a gradual
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 stability in the following years, before rising to the highest peak in 2013 and kept the same
number
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 for three years. The
number
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 of
visitors
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 who stayed on the
island
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 witnessed a decrease in 2016, which was the first in the
giving
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given
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 timeline.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words island, number, visitors with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • trough
  • upward trend
  • downward trend
  • steady increase
  • sharp decline
  • seasonal variation
  • cruise ship visitors
  • island stay visitors
  • economic impact
  • environmental impact
  • tourism industry
  • sustainable tourism
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